Hi! Love to see yumeships here - they are so rare 😭 It looks odd because the proportions and perspective are all over the place. We seem to have side view of the female character but front view of the male character. Her head is bigger than her body, his legs are too short, and his feet are humongous comparted to the rest etc. I would highly suggest start with basic mannequin construction before moving to rendering - it will save you a lot of struggles later. Making the figures small to draw out full bodies might help, too. You can zoom in later. Couple drawings are definitely very hard to draw. Try to use references or 3D models (apps like CSP and Ibis have it built in, there are also separate apps for it) as a help for now. In the long run, definitely can't skip fundamentals and anatomy. Lighting is ok, except for his arm and hand - they should be darker as they are in the shadow side. I would add more light to the side/back of his kimono. The paintover is made assuming the girl's perspective is the correct one. Upper part of the body (ends at bottom of pelvis area) should be roughly the same lengths as bottom part. Cheers!